07 November 2012 @ 04:20 pm
Unfinished Fic Wednesday  
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Today's snippet is from [livejournal.com profile] cybermathwitch. Take it away, Koren!

A/N: So there was a prompt during the prompt-a-thon made by [livejournal.com profile] anuna_81: Sword of Truth AU anyone? Where Natasha is Mord'Sith. (and Tony can be the wizard, and Steve can be the Seeker, and everyone else can help them out...) *g*

So... yeah, that happened. I already had the first bit on my computer before ever reading the prompt, actually.

Additional Note: So here's the thing. I'm a huge fan of the TV series, but not so much the books (I made it to book three, then I was done) so this is very much series canon and interpretation. Apparently my doing AUs is a thing? IDEK, I have no excuse except that the idea of Natasha as a Mord'Sith = perfect.


Getting across the border wasn't nearly as difficult as she’d thought it would be. In fact, it was almost ridiculously easy, and that has her nerves jangling at her more than anything else. Well, that and the ‘evil’ that seems to be seeping out of the very ground along the wall. People, most normal, average people, think that she’s evil, but that’s because they really have no idea. She’s dangerous, she’s unpleasant, and she might even be damaged beyond recognition, but true evil? That’s something else entirely.

Which is why she’s here.

She knows her first loyalty is supposed to be to the Lord Rahl, but in her mind, that extends to all of D’Hara, because the King is his country and the country is it’s King. And to her mind, the current “Lord Rahl” is running the country into the ground. So she’s broken all the rules, and most of her training, but she’s determined that she’s going to fix things. It’s not like her to aim for such noble and lofty goals, and really, she’s already regretting it. She was regretting it the second night out, but by then it was far too late, and they knew she was gone.

*****

"You didn't have to come with me, you know." She pushed through the dense forest without turning around, certain that he was still following her despite her words. Of course he had to come with her if she was going to go.

"You know that's a lie. What would I do if I remained in D'Hara?"

"Fall to another woman's clutches? Be someone else's plaything?" She did look then, and there was a slight twist to her mouth. It took very little of the sting out of what she'd said.

His expression was as it ever was, calm and even. He looked relaxed, and it belied that central core of strength that sometimes terrified her. People - men especially - were supposed to be malleable. Easy to break and reshape under her not inconsiderable skills. He was... none of those things.

When they'd brought him to her and thrown him, bound, at her feet, they'd told her she could break him, then do with him as she pleased. He'd disobeyed direct orders from the Lord Rahl, they'd said, and an example had to be made. She'd put on her best red leathers and started her work, expecting nothing unsual, everything the same.

But he would not break.

After two weeks, she could not break him, and that had been intolerable.

Her discomfort and uncertainty must've shown on her face - that any emotion was visible at all spoke volumes about how unsettled it had made her - and finally, he spoke.

He'd made an offer she found herself unable to refuse, that he would play the part, let her save face among her sisters (and possibly with herself) - he would give himself to her and whatever she would do with him. His will would not be broken but it would still become hers.

In a moment of weakness she'd accepted.
 
 
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[identity profile] angela-n-hunt.livejournal.com on November 7th, 2012 10:18 pm (UTC)
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE Oh please finish! This is delightful! I love the idea of Clint being the one she can't break.
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 16th, 2012 12:19 pm (UTC)
:D Thank you! I think in the first draft (by which I actually mean two paragraphs of brain-clearing) I had her as a Mord'Sith going after the Seeker who I meant to be Clint (thinking I'd just have these two in here, and wanting to kind of subvert the Confessor/Seeker balance into a Mord'Sith/Seeker balance... and that totally wasn't working. At. All.

And I honestly can't remember what I ran into that made me think to do it this way, but then their characters both just fell into place. :)
[identity profile] angela-n-hunt.livejournal.com on November 16th, 2012 03:00 pm (UTC)
Well, please continue. This is really wonderful.
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 18th, 2012 01:02 am (UTC)
:D Thanks!
[identity profile] sunny-serenity.livejournal.com on November 8th, 2012 01:08 am (UTC)
never met an AU i didn't like!
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 16th, 2012 12:16 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :D I think if I can get the rest of the characters balanced right, it'll be a pretty good thing.

(Though I'm still trying to work out what to do about Bruce and also the Confessors. Steve, obviously, is the Seeker.)
[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_samalander/ on November 16th, 2012 05:08 pm (UTC)
It's too bad there are not male confessors, because the whole Bruce/Hulk thing kinda fits the confessor/blood rage thing.
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 18th, 2012 01:05 am (UTC)
I WAS THINKING THAT TOO! And I'm *still* not 100% sure I couldn't pull that off?

I mean, how far could I stretch the idea? What if he was a male confessor that had spent his *entire life* with a Rada'Han on? And then that gets removed? Would he have managed to learn enough compassion and ethics and how-to-be-human to offset the power hungry crazy that it normally makes them? Hmm...
[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_samalander/ on November 18th, 2012 03:45 am (UTC)
Oooh, I like that. The other idea I had was some kind of spell, where he was given (cursed with?) Confessor powers in his adult life... And unlike a normal Confessor, his comes from rage?
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 18th, 2012 03:49 am (UTC)
ooooooo! What if, ok, take the Rad'a'Han idea... and then, once it's off (as an adult) - his powers are broken? He doesn't know how to trigger them normally, to do the normal "confession" thing - it's *just* the Con Darr leftover?

*__*

:D
[identity profile] hufflepuffsneak.livejournal.com on November 8th, 2012 01:42 am (UTC)
I wish I knew the source material so I could give a better comment. Did a quick wiki search and agree the idea of Natasha as a Mord'Sith is perfect.
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 16th, 2012 12:20 pm (UTC)
:D Yeah, there are SO SO SO many parallels between the Red Room and the Mord'Sith! SO MANY.
[identity profile] crazy4orcas.livejournal.com on November 8th, 2012 02:12 am (UTC)
I'm not familiar with Sword of Truth, but this really sounds intriguing.

And I adore this line:

She’s dangerous, she’s unpleasant, and she might even be damaged beyond recognition, but true evil? That’s something else entirely.
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on November 16th, 2012 12:23 pm (UTC)
Oh, yay! I love that line, too. It's like she's looking at everyone and going "no, I'm just unpleasant. You obviously don't understand what the term "evil" actually means." What they do *to* the girls to make them Mord'Sith is evil, but that doesn't mean that they themselves have to be.