21 August 2012 @ 11:19 am
The Scene  
Below is my transcript of the Loki Clint strategy scene.

Selvig: (yadda yadda) it's truth!

Loki: I know. I know. It... touches everyone, differently. What did it show you, Agent Barton?

Clint: My next target

Selvig (chuckling): stick in the mud, he's got no soul no wonder you chose this, this tomb to work in.

Clint (annoyed): Well the Radisson doesn't have three levels of lead-lined flooring between SHIELD and that Cube.

Loki: I see why Fury chose you to guard it.

::Clint and Loki start walking away from Selvig.::

Clint: You're gonna have to contend with him, sir. As long as he's in the air, I can't pin him down. They're going to be putting together a team.

Loki: They a threat?

Clint: To each other, more than likely, but if Fury can get them on track, and he might, they could throw some noise our way.

Loki: You admire Fury.

Clint: He's got a clear line of sight.

Loki: Is that why you failed to kill him?

::pauses, stops walking::

Clint: It might be. ::pauses:: I was disoriented. And... I'm not at my best with a gun.

Loki:(obviously feeling a full-on Shakespearian monology coming on): I want to know everything you can tell me about this team of his. I would... test their mettle.

::Clint nods once::

Loki:I grow weary of scuttling in shadow. I mean to rule this world, not burrow in it.

Clint: It's a risk.

Loki: Oh yes.

Clint: If you're set on making yourself known... it could be useful.

Loki:(positively, frightenly into this): Tell me what you need.

::Clint walks over to his bow case::

Clint: I need a distraction. And an eyeball.


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[identity profile] bethbethbeth.livejournal.com on August 22nd, 2012 12:54 pm (UTC)
I was doing this at the same time, so...if you want to make a few changes (or at least double check what I think should be changes):

* I know. I know. It... touches everyone, differently. What did it show you, Agent Barton?

(Loki only says "I know " once and "it" twice. So: "I know. It...it touches everyone differently."

* Loki:I grow weary of scuttling in shadow. I mean to rule this world, not burrow in it.

(No "grow." Just "I weary of scuttling in shadow.")

Otherwise, we have it pretty much the same. The only other thing I was wondering about was "Loki: They a threat?" I've played the clip over a number of times, and I still can't tell if Hiddles is swallowing the word "Are" at the start of the sentence or if he's really just not saying it. Leaving it out of the sentence would seem out of character for Loki, but...well. :)

Edited 2012-08-22 12:54 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] cybermathwitch.livejournal.com on August 22nd, 2012 11:07 pm (UTC)
Nodnod. You're probably right about those things (and I also thought the "They a threat" seemed odd) - I was going for speed over accuracy since [livejournal.com profile] sugar_fey was getting a bit desperate. ;)

I bet he is swallowing the "are" there. That makes far more sense.